Sensory impressions

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Rely on showing via sensory impressions (sights, sounds, tastes, smells, and tactile sensations) rather than telling.

Present a portrait of the place through a specific angle of vision. That is, convey a dominant attitude toward the subject, an attitude (i.e. fascination, disgust, amusement, detachment, joy, etc.) that can be implied through details or stated explicitly.